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作者:英文網  (字數:700字作文)

小升初考試作文:字數60-80 20分

[要求必須用短語; If 虛擬語氣;形比高同;現在完成.]

Beijing is changing

Every body knows that Beijing is changing. From buildings to the public transportation, everything is changing. And Beijing is becoming better and better. Last year, Beijing has hold the 2008 Olympic Games successfully and has become the focus of the world.

Beijing change is inevitable, because China is developing, and the world is developing.

The better Beijing changes, the better china changes. Yesterday, the president of U.S.A has come to visit Beijing, that means Beijing has is developed better than before. If one day I have a chance, I will develop Beijing to be the best city in the world!

老師評語:

文章很好,所需語法點全部有!而且文章很有深度!這樣寫就可以得高分!好!繼續努力!