小升初英文必看內容-作文精講

我們怎樣才能使自己的作文在眾多文章中脫穎而出，獲得閱卷老師的青睞呢？

一、善於思考 勤於積累

要想在作文中拿到高分，這需要考生在日常生活中善於觀察，不能兩耳不聞窗外事，而應積極關注當今社會熱點，如人口問題、污染問題、世界和平等一系列現象；要善於思考，勤於把自己的思想用英文正確地表達和記錄下來，只有通過不斷的積累和磨練，才能練就良好的寫作基本功。建議大家在考前把今年的相關重點問題，熱點問題回顧一下。積累一些相關辭彙，有備無患。

二、認真審題 寫好提綱

考生在拿到試卷之後，當聽力題做完，可以先看一看作文的題目與類型，對它有一個大致的印象和準備，在做語法和閱讀題時對自己的作文能有一個初步的構思。應儘可能地留出20分鐘的時間來寫作文。在正式寫作文時，可參照以下步驟：

1、認真審題，確定題目中的關鍵字。
　　2、展開一次“Brain Storm”即頭腦風暴，對該題引申出各種聯想和論點。
　　3、根據自己已有的經驗和辭彙量選擇自己最熟悉、最有把握的方面和論點來寫作。
　　4、確定基本的寫作時態，如記敘文通常用一般過去時。（時態運用錯誤是考生們大量失分的主要原因。）
　　5、對於有能力的同學，注意不能通篇均用簡單句型，可適當引入語法重點如狀語從句、賓語從句和被動語態等。這會使考生的作文有質的提高。
　　6、當整篇作文寫完，一定要進行仔細的檢查，注意使句子流暢，時態運用準確，單詞拼寫正確，冠詞運用正確，名詞的大小寫正確。

下面，我們來針對作文題型和例文進行評析。

作文題型分析與例文評析

命題作文即給出一個統一的題目，限定考生寫作的具體範圍，要求考生就同一主題展開敘述或評論。寫好命題作文的關鍵是緊扣主題、立意明確、觀點清晰。

一、命題作文

［例1］To be a lovely Shanghainese
　　審題：該題的重點在於闡述作為一個可愛的上海人，我們關鍵應怎樣做？在2003年的考生作文中，有一部分同學發生了嚴重的偏題，把描述重點放在形容上海是怎樣的一個大都市，因此失分很多。由此看來，審題的準確是非常重要的。

學生作文：Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

教師評析：該篇作文行文流暢，結構清晰，以“first，Next，Finally”的結構描述，層次感很強。不定式的恰當運用體現了考生較好的語法功底。
 
　　教師擬評分：9分

［例2］Six years' school life

審題：該題要求考生對學校生活進行回顧和總結，適合以夾敘夾議的方式來寫作。（此外，從情感教育的角度來看，閱卷老師總希望讀到考生回憶自己美好、快樂的學校生活，而不是討厭自己的母校、老師、同學等消極情緒的體現。）

學生作文：I've been in my  school for six years. Six years' school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the past six years. I will never forget my six years' school life. 

教師評析：整篇作文非常明快、流暢，體現了考生對母校依依不捨的情懷。由於是對學校生活的回顧和總結，考生恰當地選擇以現在完成時作為主要的時態來強調影響和結果,文中"plays an important role"這一詞組和被動語態的正確運用也體現了考生良好的辭彙和語法功底。
 
　　教師擬評分：10分

二、套用文寫作

套用文主要包括信函、電郵、日記、通知、廣告、電話等形式，它要求考生不僅能表達題中的主要內容，還能夠正確地運用各種文本格式進行規範的書寫，這也是考生對於英文傳統文化了解多少的反映。因此，考生應在臨考前系統地複習各種文本格式以及打電話的規範用語，以做到處變不驚、百戰百勝。
 
　　［例3］寫一封信給你在雲南省西雙版納市的筆友李帆，告訴他你很願意與他交朋友，並邀請他到上海來旅行。

審題：該題要求考生以規範的信件格式來書寫，並把題中所出現的信息點都涵概在內。建議考生可把題目中的信息點都一一划出，以免發生遺漏。

　　學生作文：
Lifan
Xishuangbanna
Yunnan Province China

May25th,2004

Dear Lifan,
　　Thank you for your letter. I'm glad to be your pen-friend. We are the same years old, but we were born in different places. In my imagination, Xishuangbanna is a very beautiful place. There are a lot of plants and animals. You know I look forward to visiting Xishuangbanna. Would you like to come to Shanghai? I'd like to invite you to Shanghai in summer holiday. Shanghai is also a beautiful place. It is a modern city. There are a lot of interesting places such as the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the Bund, and Nanjing Road Walkway.
　　If you come here, I will show you around Shanghai. You can live at my home and my mother will cook you much delicious food. Let's be best friends!

Yours sincerely,

Xiaomin
　　
　　教師擬評分：9分

　　［例4］寫一篇題為“A Visit To_____”的日記。

　　審題：該題為半命題式作文。考生除了要注意運用正確的日記格式，還可根據自己的經驗和熟悉程度來選擇、確定文章的主題.

　　學生作文：

May 25th, 2004 　　 sunny　

A Visit To Jinmao Building

　　Jinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today.
　　The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.
 
　　教師評析：整篇作文主題明確，對於金茂大廈的描述也較具體，文中“the signal construction”一詞是全文的亮點。但整篇文章的層次不夠清晰，句子也以簡單句為主，對於參觀這一動詞的闡述還不夠充分。
　　教師擬評分：8分

三、看圖寫話

看圖寫話是英文作文常考的一種形式，但隨著牛津版教材的大量套用，學生的寫作能力有了較大的提高，因此作文的要求和難度也相應提高。所以，在作文中繼續出現簡單的敘事型看圖寫話的可能性很小，但有可能會提供給考生一些具有寓意的漫畫或圖片，要求考生從中發現問題、提出自己的觀點，這對考生的邏輯思維能力和英文語言的嫻熟運用都提出了更高的要求。
 
　　審題：這幅漫畫蘊涵了一個深刻的主題即戰爭與和平，這與當今世界的熱點問題密切相關，它不僅考核考生是否能流暢地表達自己的觀點，更需要考生站在人文關懷的高度來觀察整個世界。

　　學生作文： 

  A Represent of Freedom and Peace

Almost everyday we can see there are always a huge number of pigeons enjoying the sunbath in some large squares, but do you often care what a white pigeon stands for? That is peace. For hundreds of years, people always regard pigeons as a represent of freedom and peace. That is because of not only its lovely pure figure,  but also its great passion to the outside world. Till now, I still can't help thinking of such a picture: In Iraq, a boy was watching a white pigeon over his head. The background was full of wounded solders and guns. Thus, this lovely white pigeon was contrastive to this iced background and gave people a deep consideration. Suddenly, athought comes into my mind: Why there have been so many wars in the world just for someone's own interest? Why can't people live like as mall pigeon with freedom? I hope there will not be wars, FOREVER!

教師評析：應該說，要把這篇看圖作文寫好是有相當難度的，但考生以非常流暢的筆調從鴿子聯想到自由與和平，再聯想到發生在伊拉克的戰爭。文風成熟老練，這在小學生的作文中是難能可貴的。

教師擬評分：10分

［例6］審題：該圖要求考生先看懂漫畫，對它進行清晰的描述，同時根據其隱藏的寓意提出自己的觀點，如在此圖中應關注樹木被砍伐而提出環保的重要性。

學生作文：

Seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. But as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. He will ask: What are these? Are these trees? Of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. Actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. The covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. As we all know, trees are very important in our life. They can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. So I appeal: Don't cut down trees. Let' s make our earth greener for our later generation. Don't let the children think trees are only roots!
 
　　教師評析：整篇作文結構清晰，全文分三段，第一段詳細地描述漫畫的內容；第二段闡述其蘊涵的寓意即環保對於世界和後代們的重要性；第三段提出作者的號召，使文章的結尾明快、有力！
　　教師擬評分：10分

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